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the edge of your thighs
butterfly tilt to welcome
the pressure of wrists bound
between loosened ties and
caught off guard confessions
dog ear my favorite commercials
as i crumble to my knees
gasping
over her smile and her hair and her body
and oh, oh, oh, her hands tremble my jaw
take a bite out of me, boy
i'll do you one better
with rotten meat and cracked femurs
stuck in the glitter of my incisors
challenge me until we're whimpering
he took her dare literally
hands trapped in the smoke of her hair
bruises swelling her mouth and her ribs
she became the sad yowler, lonely scavenger they always claimed she was
but she tipped her chin up and she smiledfuckyou
you're a slave to your tragedies
but oh, you twist them to be beautiful
and we croon and we slaver and we beg
you're brilliant, you're brilliant
we don't want to be you though
but we do
we really do.
butterfly tilt to welcome
the pressure of wrists bound
between loosened ties and
caught off guard confessions
dog ear my favorite commercials
as i crumble to my knees
gasping
over her smile and her hair and her body
and oh, oh, oh, her hands tremble my jaw
take a bite out of me, boy
i'll do you one better
with rotten meat and cracked femurs
stuck in the glitter of my incisors
challenge me until we're whimpering
he took her dare literally
hands trapped in the smoke of her hair
bruises swelling her mouth and her ribs
she became the sad yowler, lonely scavenger they always claimed she was
but she tipped her chin up and she smiledfuckyou
you're a slave to your tragedies
but oh, you twist them to be beautiful
and we croon and we slaver and we beg
you're brilliant, you're brilliant
we don't want to be you though
but we do
we really do.
hmmm...which poem do we like better for the prompt[link] ?
this poem or [link] ?
i think the original poem has a better story, but i dont think it fits the prompt well
however, this one, might fit the prompt better but i just dont like it as much
wanna help me fix this one up? please? thanks!
let me know which one you like better! thanks!
this poem or [link] ?
i think the original poem has a better story, but i dont think it fits the prompt well
however, this one, might fit the prompt better but i just dont like it as much
wanna help me fix this one up? please? thanks!
let me know which one you like better! thanks!
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I think I prefer this one. The language, the images, the meter are all much stronger.
The problem I've having at the moment though is that you're language is so cryptic I can't really work out what your fantasies are... :S
The problem I've having at the moment though is that you're language is so cryptic I can't really work out what your fantasies are... :S